Saved : Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. 08/25/2015 week 28


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Dawn M. Miller provided the photo prompt.

My story:

The group of campers stood in awe, while listening to the quavering sound rolling nearer.

It had been a lovely warm long week-end. The group of friends decided to camp for the weekend near the creek. Across the creek was a modern train bridge.

The rolling noise came from behind the bridge. They could not decide if it was a train coming or something else. They could not place the sound. What could it be?

Suddenly they heard the train rolling past. The train gone, the real rumbling went on.  It came from falling and moving rocks.

It was an earthquake. Where were they going to hide? The earth moved under them and away, without the falling rocks reaching them.

They were so lucky. The bridge broke in front of them and stopped the rubble from moving over them.

The newspaper heading read: Campers saved by falling bridge.

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24 responses to “Saved : Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. 08/25/2015 week 28”

  1. milliethom Avatar

    A real piece of drama this week, Scrapydo. I’ve never actually witnessed an earthquake – apart from on film – but I know they’re terrifying things. Nature can certainly throw such disasters at us – in some countries more than others. You created their feeling of dread very well. I just hope their was no traffic on the bridge as it collapsed.

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Earth quakes are shockers! Earth really rises up under you and moves on. Sound and trembles can also be heard and felt from afar. One day when we had heavy shakes I sat in my passage at home with Trompie in in my arms praying aloud for the shakes to stop. Lucky in my story the train had passed just before!

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      1. milliethom Avatar

        Yes, the passengers on that train were very lucky. It must be gut-churning to experience what you have just described.

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        1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

          Yes, some of the Kiwis(New Zealanders) take it without being afraid! I think deep inside they still fear it. My home is a brick building, it does not move around that much. My son has a wooden house and built on stilts. It moves and shakes a lot. It must be like that. There has to be space for movement when the earth shakes.

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          1. milliethom Avatar

            Yes, I’ve read about the building designs in earthquake prone regions. I imagine most new buildings where you are follow those designs nowadays.

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            1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

              They are forced by law to re-enforce the older buildings. Specially after the last quakes they had to re-asses the buildings before using them again

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              1. milliethom Avatar

                All for the best. Every precaution must be taken, I know. Keep safe, Ineke.

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                1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

                  Thanks. I am happy to be here away from the killings and corruption in South Africa

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                  1. milliethom Avatar

                    I bet you are glad to be away from all that, though I’m sure you miss your homeland, as most of us would. I know how much you want to get back for a visit – and how my post about kapok trees made you think of home. New Zealand sounds a great place to be – apart from the earthquakes, of course.

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                    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

                      Every country has its own good and bad things. I made wonderful friends here already. Positive thinking makes life worth living in a new country at an old age. I do love it here.

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      2. milliethom Avatar

        I forgot to say…I hope Trompie is recovering well from his operation. He’s been through a lot, poor little lad.

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        1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

          Thank you for thinking of him.He is such a good boy. I hope to get the test results soon.

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          1. milliethom Avatar

            Fingers crossed they’re what you want to hear. 🙂

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            1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

              Fingers and toes also!

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              1. milliethom Avatar

                I’ll do that!

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                1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

                  It is not cancer! So glad! 😀

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                  1. milliethom Avatar

                    I’m so happy to hear that! Things would not have been looking too good for Trompie if the tumour had been malignant. He can just get well and enjoy life again now.

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  2. Spokie sny spoor Avatar

    Sjoe! Dit nou lucky.

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Beslis (nie dat so n brug juis baie kan keer nie, steeds het dit gehelp) Welkom terug .

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  3. rondomtaliedraai Avatar

    Lekker storie met ‘n goeie uitkoms

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Ja wat, daar is so baie ongelukke en hartseer, mens kan darem bietjie veilig ook wees.

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      1. rondomtaliedraai Avatar

        Ja hier gaan dit ook woes!

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  4. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

    They were lucky it wasn’t a strong quake too. Thanks for reading and your lovely words. 🙂

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  5. Priceless Joy Avatar

    They certainly were lucky! Apparently they had chosen the right place to camp. Great story Scrapydo2! Thank you for participating in the Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers challenge!

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