The omen: FFfAW – week 11-17-2015


 

“I can’t go on anymore!”  Sophy slowly went down on her knees. She bent over and stretched out between the long grass covering her face in her arms. Her tears were wetting the arms of her t-shirt. She was sobbing and did not realize that something slowly floated up to her.

A soft voice called her name: “Sophy, Sophy don’t give up! You are strong and can fight your father’s abuse. I’ll help you. You just have to believe in yourself.”

Sophy slowly lifted her head.  In front of her was a shimmering white peacock. It’s tail wide open reflecting the last sunshine of the day.

The white peacock’s eyes were soft and calming. It brought a good omen of escape and healing to Sophy.

She got up and went home to face her father. She stood strong against his mental abuse and walked away never to return again.

Word count : 149

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29 responses to “The omen: FFfAW – week 11-17-2015”

  1. angelswhisper2011 Avatar

    That is a wonderful story and happy end, my furriend 🙂 We hope all these children will see the white peacock in the end. Happy Pawkisses for the day 🙂 ❤

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Yes me too. Thanks for reading and your kind words, Angel High paws

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  2. Forestwoodfolkart Avatar
    Forestwoodfolkart

    Sophy was brave. It is not an easy thing – to walk away. Good story. Optimistic ending

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Thank you. Many can’t escape the abuse.

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      1. Forestwoodfolkart Avatar
        Forestwoodfolkart

        Just the other day came across a lady trappwd at home by her partners dusapproval and control. Without outside family support she will always be trapped

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        1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

          Really bad. I know how she feels. I am glad I could stand strong at the end and go out into the world without abuse. It is so easy to abuse without knowing it.

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          1. Forestwoodfolkart Avatar
            Forestwoodfolkart

            So many of us have experienced domestic violence and or abuse: mental physical or emotional. It is a testament to the human will and spirit that we do and can stand strong!!!

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            1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

              That’s for sure. 🙂

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              1. Forestwoodfolkart Avatar
                Forestwoodfolkart

                But we survived!!!

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  3. nowathome Avatar

    So hartseer hoe baie kinders hierdeur moet gaan! Pragtig geskryf, Ineke!

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Dankie. Ja dit is erg. Daar is baie wat die dinge daagliks meemaak. Tog is daar darem van hul wat dit ontsnap op einde.

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      1. nowathome Avatar

        Dit is vertroostend!

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        1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

          Beslis hoop vir party.

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  4. Toortsie Avatar

    Hartseer verhaal van ‘n sterk persoon.
    Fantastiese wit pou!

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Dankie, ja so n wit pou is besonders.

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  5. Spokie sny spoor Avatar

    Oulik geskryf. (jammer eks bietjie skaars, hierdie tyd van die jaar voor ons toemaak gaan dit malrof by die werk.)

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Dankie vir die lees. Ek weet dit gaan rof hierdie tyd van die jaar. Ek is self ook heel agter met alles. Sterkte maar daardie kant.

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  6. anotherday2paradise Avatar

    Great story. Love the ending. 😃

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Thank you. It is very hard for young ones to overcome the pain and abuse parents cause them.

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      1. anotherday2paradise Avatar

        Oh yes, I agree. Any form of bullying is difficult to deal with.

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        1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

          As a teacher one can easily see who has a difficult time at home.(Years of experience is what I mean)

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  7. Stories Uit My Wereld Avatar

    Jy sê baie met min.

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Baie dankie. Dit is hoekom ek van die beperkte woorde gebruik maak. (veral in Eng.)

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Baie dankie, bly jy hou daarvan.

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  8. Priceless Joy Avatar

    Wonderful story Scrapydo2! I like the moral to the story – we have the strength within us to do what we must do to improve our lives. I really like your spin on the prompt! Nicely done!

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Thank you very much for kind words. Glad I could give the feeling through as I wanted it.

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  9. Lewies Mymer Avatar

    Daar is innerlike krag in elkeen van ons.

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Dit is waar. Mens besef nie altyd dat daar so n krag is nie! Omstandighede maak of breek n mens.

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