Creative WRITING: Using descriptions about sound.


Lesson four was to use descriptive words for sound.

Nighttime and early morning on the farm.

Night time on the farm. The Birds finish their day’s work by singing their last songs before darkness falls. People rush home from work. Some high-pitched or low-pitched vehicle sounds depend on how slow or fast they move on the narrow road. Always in a hurry. Late at night or early morning, some boy racers screech past, stepping on the brake and gas to get the most noise out of the tyres burning the tarmac. It starts with a far-off metallic chirping, changing to a full blast of jarring ear-piercing noise when all hell breaks loose in tyres doing burnouts.

“More-Pork, more-pork”, the last call from New Zealand’s owl calling its mate before going to bed for the day.

“Cock-a-doodle-do” next door’s cockerel followed up on the Morepork.

Morning has broken

Like the first morning

Blackbird has spoken like the first bird (Cat Stephens)

Birds sing melodic wake-up songs in the trees.

The hens cluck while scratching in the grass, looking for bits to eat.

Two Paradise Duck whoosh overhead, whoop-whooping their dismay to the world that they have an intruder. Paradise Ducks pair for life and can’t take it when other ducks come into their nesting space. A Magpie swoops down to the duck’s nest. Suddenly two plovers shriek and dive onto the Magpie. Mr Magpie, happy with his movement, flies with clapping wings into a tree. There, he gives a richly melodious outing to his feelings. Magpies are very bossy and just take over where they can. 

Again, the plovers started squealing with excitement. This time a hawk floated silently on the lookout for something to eat. The plovers fly and duck like dive bombers at the hawk. Best of all, the Magpie joined in the chase.

Praise for the singing, praise for the morning

Praise for them springing fresh from the world (Morning has broken; Cat Stephens))

https://nzbirdsonline.org.nz/species/paradise-shelduck

Morpork
Magpie

24 responses to “Creative WRITING: Using descriptions about sound.”

  1. kharms8 Avatar

    I immediately had to listen to “Morning has Broken” after reading this.
    Lovely work!

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  2. Forestwood Avatar

    Fantastic passage Ineke, and I really could hear the sounds and sights. I was there in the moment with you! I especially liked this sentence with onomatopoeia and loads of visuals. “Two Paradise Duck whoosh overhead, whoop-whooping their dismay to the world that they have an intruder.”

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Thanks Amanda. I’m going to put your lovely comment with my other comments so that I can treasure every ones positive comments.

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      1. Forestwood Avatar

        Great idea!

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  3. cjstarlight Avatar

    Lovely description

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Thank you starlight.

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  4. aduppie Avatar

    Dis asof ek hulle so voor my kan sien. Treffend beskryf

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Dankie Amanda, Bly dit gee regte prentjie dis waaroor dit tog maar gaan.

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  5. Forestwood Avatar

    Just as a read this a large crow flew past my window! Great work, Ineke. I particularly liked your description of the birds and I could easily imagine the burnouts you described.

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Thanks for your feedback. Its good to know that you get the picture.

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  6. HesterLeyNel Avatar

    Welgedaan Scrapy! Dis ‘n baie goeie omskrywing van geluide in jou omgewing.

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Baie dankie Hester, ek bly maar steeds onseker van die Engels.

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      1. HesterLeyNel Avatar

        Hoe meer jt skryf, hoe makliker gaan dit vloei. Hou moed.

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        1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

          Ek weet, ek het beslis al 100% verbeter van ek begin het. Nou vorseer ek mos myself om nog hoër te klim. Dankie vir ondersteuning.

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  7. Aletta - nowathome Avatar

    Pragtig geskryf Ineke!

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Baie dankie Aletta vir jou mooi woorde.

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  8. Una Avatar

    Dis so mooi geskryf, Scrapy.

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Dankie Una vir jou mooi woorde. Dit vat baie inspanning en dink om dit sover te kry dat dit na iets klink.

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  9. Meezer'sMews&TerrieristicalWoofs Avatar

    I love your very good descriptive words! I could almost hear everything way over here!

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Aha thank you for your comment I’m glad you could almost hear it over at your place. Thanks again for reading and commenting.

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  10. elsabeskryf Avatar

    Morning has broken… een van my klavierstukke op skool gewees. Saam met jou beskrywing van voels en mens… kry dit sommer nuwe betekenis. 😁

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    1. scrapydo2.wordpress.com Avatar

      Dankie vir jou mooi woorde. Dis eintlik nie die Blackbird wat eerste praat nie maar dis steeds dagbreek met al die geluide.

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